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brainofckI am writing a section now from General Hammond's point of view.
So is he George? Hammond? Gen. Hammond?
For instance, here we have the obligatory infirmary scene, where Jack is waking up for the first time de-goa'uld'ed. (Um. Yeah. That's a word.) Anyway, this is what it looks like when I write it from Jack's POV:
But from Hammond's own POV?
Do you see what I'm getting at? Usually when I write from one character's POV, even though I almost always write in the third person, I still feel like a tight POV is more intimate to the character, and should reflect what would go on inside that character's head. So Gen. Hammond, from his own POV ought to think of himself as himself, right? And that is not necessarily all caught up in the General business. I have no problem writing Jack as Jack, rather than Col. O'Neill... Just feels all weird to type George.
Hmmmm. Maybe I'll write it one way, see what people think in the feedback, then do a big revision if it doesn't work...
Heh. Now I want to post an inspirational picture of George, but it would take forever to find one download it, upload it, blah, blah... Eheheheh. Is there a![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-userinfo.gif)
hammond_daily? *snickers*
EDIT: OMG! Loving my new icons! Look at Jack and Daniel! They are listening so attentively to my musings about what to call George! Thought they both look like they might be *right* on the edge of exasperation! Tee hee!
So is he George? Hammond? Gen. Hammond?
For instance, here we have the obligatory infirmary scene, where Jack is waking up for the first time de-goa'uld'ed. (Um. Yeah. That's a word.) Anyway, this is what it looks like when I write it from Jack's POV:
- "We don't know that for a fact, Colonel," General Hammond replied quietly.
"Oh, he's dead, General. I gave the order to his First Prime myself. They shoved him out into space with ten mintues' of air."
"Daniel's dead."
General Hammond just shook his head.
But from Hammond's own POV?
- "We don't know that for a fact, Colonel," George replied quietly.
"Oh, he's dead, General. I gave the order to his First Prime myself. They shoved him out into space with ten mintues' of air."
"Daniel's dead."
George just shook his head.
Do you see what I'm getting at? Usually when I write from one character's POV, even though I almost always write in the third person, I still feel like a tight POV is more intimate to the character, and should reflect what would go on inside that character's head. So Gen. Hammond, from his own POV ought to think of himself as himself, right? And that is not necessarily all caught up in the General business. I have no problem writing Jack as Jack, rather than Col. O'Neill... Just feels all weird to type George.
Hmmmm. Maybe I'll write it one way, see what people think in the feedback, then do a big revision if it doesn't work...
Heh. Now I want to post an inspirational picture of George, but it would take forever to find one download it, upload it, blah, blah... Eheheheh. Is there a
hammond_daily? *snickers*EDIT: OMG! Loving my new icons! Look at Jack and Daniel! They are listening so attentively to my musings about what to call George! Thought they both look like they might be *right* on the edge of exasperation! Tee hee!
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Date: 2005-08-25 12:21 pm (UTC)So, the name-reference is for the convenience of the readers, who have already gotten used to seeing and hearing Gen. Hammond.
Ooooh, now you icon is listening attentively to me! And I think they are saying
She's so on crackWe Agree!But which she?
Date: 2005-08-25 12:25 pm (UTC)Hey, that rhymes!
Yes, I already had the same thought you had that he doesn't think of himself by any name.
Still... I'm writing it with George just to try it out. But I may fall back to your position in the end. I think you are right and that's what's causing my problem, but I think I am right that it's weird to write a tight POV from his perspective and still refer to him as General.
Might try a rewrite with him as simply Hammond. *ponders*
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Date: 2005-08-25 08:03 pm (UTC)Lookee what I did. Couldn't resist iconing. They don't have the pondering look your icon does, though. ;-)
Loving your icon
Date: 2005-08-26 12:59 am (UTC)I think in the end I'm probably going to change it all to Hammond. But remains to be seen. Perhaps will leave as George and alarm everyone! Go me!
Now my icon is looking at me severely and suggesting maybe it's time for bed. Ack! Unintended overtones! Not Mary Sue! Or self-insertion!
Re: Loving your icon
Date: 2005-08-26 02:43 am (UTC)right before they jump on each other for the mad frottage. Friction burns ahoy!Aaaah! Hammond/Very Secret Diaries crossover! Mommy, I'm frightened. (Daniel's still the prettiest. Jack will kill Hathor if she touches him.) Aaaaaah! It's contagious!
Dude, it is your LJ. You insert yourself right into bed with J/D if you want to -- I know I would!!! *distracts God for you*
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Date: 2005-08-31 02:33 am (UTC)Also, there's no reason to have the second apostrophe in "de-goa'uld'ed" so kill it. :)
And, umm, no, I don't think there's a
Angie
Hush, you!
Date: 2005-08-31 02:55 am (UTC)Fie on you and your punctuation/spelling comment! *snert*
I think any hammond_daily should be called HammondofTexas... And I've done enough things lately to make people think I'm on drugs. And I swear, there's an ice cream-based Dark Muse-type story on the way. I start Hammond_Daily, and the men in white jackets will be waiting by the door in the morning...
Re: Hush, you!
Date: 2005-08-31 06:54 pm (UTC)Hey, just doing my part to stem the horrible epidemic of Apostrophe Abuse sweeping through the English-speaking world. :P
Angie
Re: Hush, you!
Date: 2005-08-31 09:53 pm (UTC)Re: Hush, you!
Date: 2005-08-31 10:34 pm (UTC)Angie