You wouldn't let me do that, would you?

I was reading a little light SG-1 orgy!fic tonight. (Sorry, green_grrl. Your OTP thoroughly violated.)

My first thought was, wow, this could be anybody. All the personalities completely lost. And she did Sam's POV, but I wasn't buying that as Sam for a second.

But still, very readable, the sex was hot. Could have been worse.

But one thing I did notice. She wrote, "Men and women of both sexes..." *facepalm* If I wrote something like that, you'd point it out to me right away, wouldn't you, gentle readers?

Also, one day I'm going to go back and fix Dark Muse. In the original one I committed a sin that bothers me probably a couple of times a month. The "breath s/he didn't know s/he'd been holding" cliche. EVERY SINGLE WRITER has done it. Oh, you know you have! I did it in my very first piece, have FOUGHT it in several pieces since then, and may still have to go back and excise it from that thing. *cringes thinking about it*

So call me on the really overdone cliches, too, if I let one slip by.

:)