this is just wonderful. i'm all about the pwp's, but exploring the dynamic that could get them there is totally a favorite thing of mine and really, as much fun as the sex.
i love how awkward this is, how they argue, how it's jack's spiteful tongue that kicks it all off, how he and daniel talk in code at the base, daniel's motivations throughout. i love your portrait of sam, i love how you weave in canon, i love the jack point of view, i especially love the humor.
i loved how you had jack thinking about who got to be the girl when with teal'c, and how there was no way to simplify the situation. i loved what you had jack say they all did for him, when he was explaining his feelings to daniel.
above all, i love how they all TALK. i can hear them. you made me believe it.
a very personal idiosyncracy : i find the spelling cum, cumming to be jarring and it just doesn't work for me. but that's just me!
it's very clean -- i wasn't reading for typos but there were only maybe a couple!
thanks again for running the ficathon and thank you for a wonderful, wonderful, IC story that mixes funny and sweet and hot. I will certainly be rereading this one. wow.
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Date: 2006-11-06 12:03 pm (UTC)i love how awkward this is, how they argue, how it's jack's spiteful tongue that kicks it all off, how he and daniel talk in code at the base, daniel's motivations throughout. i love your portrait of sam, i love how you weave in canon, i love the jack point of view, i especially love the humor.
i loved how you had jack thinking about who got to be the girl when with teal'c, and how there was no way to simplify the situation. i loved what you had jack say they all did for him, when he was explaining his feelings to daniel.
above all, i love how they all TALK. i can hear them. you made me believe it.
a very personal idiosyncracy : i find the spelling cum, cumming to be jarring and it just doesn't work for me. but that's just me!
it's very clean -- i wasn't reading for typos but there were only maybe a couple!
thanks again for running the ficathon and thank you for a wonderful, wonderful, IC story that mixes funny and sweet and hot. I will certainly be rereading this one. wow.