Really good :) And I don't think it was all that derivative of other slavefics (and believe me, I've read hundreds of them).
The only 'iffy' bit IMO was the ending - I liked your explanation for why Jack's implant could be easily removed, and Daniel's not (that made sense), but Jack wanting to have sex with Daniel again, and calling him Sir, did *not* make sense at all, and thus seemed rather forced. But I'm not really a Jack/Daniel fan so that probably colours my judgement a bit.
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Really good :) And I don't think it was all that derivative of other slavefics (and believe me, I've read hundreds of them).
The only 'iffy' bit IMO was the ending - I liked your explanation for why Jack's implant could be easily removed, and Daniel's not (that made sense), but Jack wanting to have sex with Daniel again, and calling him Sir, did *not* make sense at all, and thus seemed rather forced. But I'm not really a Jack/Daniel fan so that probably colours my judgement a bit.
Now I'm off to rec the story at